[twiztidlestat]

Forever I shall remain in stone, Cold, motionless, tears falling alone,
I tried as I cried to stop the midnightmares I stared as I laid at the celler,
I was scared The monk whispered through the bars ''Life ends, and shatters amongst the ...stars''
I beckoned for him to come closer A hairline slit ended his life,
cementing my closure I felt her as she past from miles away Lost in her scent, forbidden to stay


She walked, imagining he was watching her,Stalking her,
Exagerating the pain he felt Her heart began to melt with the words not spoke His hands touching the threads of her hair before she awoke
''I miss those mornings'' A kiss to t...hose who mourn things He shifted, his emotions lifted,
The monk is now his ghoul,
The dark life gifted

[Prak]

Posting poetry here is dangerous. This is why:

lol @ this pile of preposterous wank

[doomjockey]

Some structure would be nice.

[JacksonHugh]

lol @ this pile of preposterous wank

Seconded.

[IDX]

I lost where it was going about 3 seconds in.

[Techchild]

Posting poetry here is dangerous. This is why:

lol @ this pile of preposterous wank

hi there!!!

[Trowa]

Haiku:

give me my long sword
insert it into my flesh
that is what she said

[Edmond Dantes]

Something tells me the original poster is emo.

[Trowa]

Ya talk about really spilling your guts out. ballsy nontheless

[TheGiftedOne]

Nice job! The ideas are really good and it is very emotional.

[CC]

Posting poetry here is dangerous. This is why:

lol @ this pile of preposterous wank


Something tells me the original poster is emo.

[いぶき]

Here is my poem:

The hooker in the car
The hooker in the car
If I knew she was a man I wouldn't have banged her ass.

[CC]

Here is my poem:

The hooker in the car
The hooker in the car
If I knew she was a man I wouldn't have banged her ass.

Fascinating.

[Edmond Dantes]

Here is my poem:

The hooker in the car
The hooker in the car
If I knew she was a man I wouldn't have banged her ass.

No, no, no its....

The hooker in the car
The hooker in the car
If I knew she was a man I wouldn't have rode her very far.

there. i corrected it for you.

[CC]

No, no, no its....

The hooker in the car
The hooker in the car
If I knew she was a man I wouldn't have rode her very far.

there. i corrected it for you.

LOL, much better :D

I'm having no trouble seeing why whoever that was got banned :O

[Darth Revan]

It's so very sad to see the English language being raped and abused the way it has with the so called 'poems' in this thread.

So very, very sad...

:cryingbatman:

[Edmond Dantes]

yeah no shit Gregman.

[Red]

Roses are red
violets are blue
all my base
are belong to you

[TM]

I remember:

Roses are red
violets are blue
get on your knees bitch
you know what to do

oh Sain <3

[twiztidlestat]

Wow. People on a final Fantasy forum have the nerve to judge? Wow, I guess even anime loving nerd have to pick on someone.

[Edmond Dantes]

we're a bunch of pricks around here. sometimes. anyway. welcome to the forum and all that jazz.

[CC]

Wow. People on a final Fantasy forum have the nerve to judge? Wow, I guess even anime loving nerd have to pick on someone.

How do you figure? Is a Final Fantasy forum somehow an invalid place to express an opinion?

[Edmond Dantes]

i feel i should express my opinion with a machine gun.

[CC]

i feel i should express my opinion with a machine gun.

I think some of these anonymous 1-10-post nobodies who drift around here spouting their bullshit and then run away need it.

[Edmond Dantes]

I think some of these anonymous 1-10-post nobodies who drift around here spouting their bullshit and then run away need it.

I agree. It's gonna be a fuckin' bloodbath up in here soon.

[CC]

Yea, go Laguna on these noobs, bro :D

[Edmond Dantes]

or how about I get Abe Lincoln's zombie corpse to go steampunk on them?

[CC]

DUUUUUUUUUDE!! That is some epicness of vast proportions right there :D

[TM]

Wow. People on a final Fantasy forum have the nerve to judge? Wow, I guess even anime loving nerd have to pick on someone.

Wow, people on a FINAL FANTASY FORUM! have the nerve to post shitty poems? Wow, I guess even wrist sliting fuckheads have to post their shit somewhere.

[Edmond Dantes]

TM I fuckin' love you man! HAHA!

[HENARRY JAYA]

its really good

this would be my version

are their ways to say no
are their excuses to say you disagree
will a flick of the head
or a roll of the eyes
do the trick

that's just the first part i just added the eye thing...

The poem was good. It sounds a bit like you just started, so I'll give you a few tips since most of it comes with practice.
1. Try to keep the rhythm going. For example:
Rhythm is power and feeling inside.
A hypnotic beat no one can hide.
It flows through you body and out the door
and continues to flow till it's no more.

[CC]

I'll give you a few tips since most of it comes with practice.
1. Be less emo.
2. The end.

[Darth Revan]

To the OP and anyone else who post poetry...

A lot of people on this forum detest poetry with emo undertones and such, hence you will receive flames.

Myself? I don't like poetry much, but to each their own, yes?