[One dreamers path]

[Memento Mori]

You think too much.

The wording is very eloquent, but I see no rhythm within this... Makes it very tough to read and aligns it more with prose, rather than poetry.

[Zachron]

Dude!!! Poetry can be prose too you know... Ever heard of a famous poet named Edgar Allen Poe... Stricking similaritiess. Reminds me of Anabell Lee, only the love interest is not dead...